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Correct my English grammar?
Regarding his studies, Brian is actually following a normal year, with major in science. He concentrated more on skating during the 2001-2002 season as he skated at Europeans (bronze medal!) and World Championships, and at the Olympic Games. In the long term specter, Brian thinks about getting his diploma to become a coach, and why not later becoming the manager of the French Teams.
His main goal is clear : to become European, World and Olympic champion ! His best souvenir so far : the parade of the Oympic Game opening ceremony. His best element in skating : jumps with four rotation if possible… The loop is his least-favored jump, even though he has already landed it in combination after a triple flip. Besides the jumps, another element he like is simply forward crossovers, because ‘when you do them right you don’t feel the ice anymore’.
You start out in the present tense and then change to past tense (concentrated). Modify the word to read concentrates.
“. . . with major in science . . .” should read: “with a major in science . . .”
(bronze medal!) should read: (where he earned the Bronze Medal.)
Lose the word ‘specter’ where appearing.
“. . . and why not later becoming the manager of the French Teams.” should end with a question mark because of “why not later.” I recommend deleting that portion of the sentence because it can appear awkward. Instead, modify the sentence to read: “and even considers becoming the manager of the French Teams.”
You have a surplus of colons in your narrative. Consider omitting a few and plug in the necessary words.
“another element he like is . . . )= he likes is the correct form.
The ending period is always inside the ending quotation mark, never on the outside, i.e., . . . “when you do them right you don’t feel the ice anymore.”
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